"Torn Together"

[ateolf]

I tell you that I love you again
And you smile just like you already knew
You're acting like we're just friends
But your friends aren't the ones getting screwed
You've got several more friends at your backdoor
Bending backwards for your every whim
And I'm twisted and broken on your bedroom floor
Trying to bend backwards for you again

chorus:
And your friends are acting smarter 'cuz
they've got bigger muscles than me
It just keeps getting harder
to tell which one of them I should be
Maybe I should give up and
see if I can learn to be free
But I keep crawling back just
like those other men grabbing your knees

And now you're telling me that you're not mine
But you'd never hesitate to say I'm yours
Oh honey, it should be a crime
The way we spend our hearts for some little whore's
I think I had better slow down
Before I bring this iron across your face
Whenever I turn to you I'm turned around
I can't tell between love and hate

I think your bed is gonna collapse
It can only take so much weight
Your other friends are caught up in its little traps
You just need me to compensate
But I'll tell you that I love you one more time
And I know that it won't be the last
'Cuz I can see me living with you for the rest of my life
All this blood will be left to the past
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yea, i don't typically write stuff that rhymes and especially don't typically do the verse-chorus thing...but i was in a little Elvis Costello wannabe moment...one thing though, i'm a little undecided if i should leave the last line as i previously had it: "And I know that I'll say it again ... All this blood just tells me I'm gonna win" any preferences?

Comments

[dearmelynn.livejournal.com]

I like the "gonna win" one.

[absolution.livejournal.com]

i hope it does not offend you when i say this to me read like a descendents lyric sheet. it isn't meant to be offensive; i mean it as a compliment of a particular kind.

[ateolf.livejournal.com]

they've already been burned...

[deadmaxi.livejournal.com]

there's something about it that makes me think albini instead of costello..

but i like it..

[ateolf.livejournal.com]

usually when i go for one thing it ends up being something else...not that that's bad...it kinda helps balance things out...though in my head it still sounds Costello-ish...of course the tune i came up w/ the words to is Costello-ish (somewhere between "Alison" and "Battered Old Bird") so i guess that plays a part...i have trouble seeing the Albini though, but maybe that's 'cuz i can't separate the words w/ the tune that's in my head...

i'll be damned

[newness-ends.livejournal.com]

i definitely see the albini-ism, maybe moreso than the costello influence, now that i think about it...

[newness-ends.livejournal.com]

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaand it kinda reminds me of joe jackson.

[ateolf.livejournal.com]

hey, isn't Joe Jackson a third rate Elvis Costello too?

[newness-ends.livejournal.com]

you are correct. sir.

Costello

[i-am-in-here.livejournal.com]

When I got to "Oh honey it should be a crime," I thought you might be writing lyrics from an actual Costello song. So yeah, it's pretty Costello-ish to me.

Re: Costello

[ateolf.livejournal.com]

woo! nuthin' better than imitation...